Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter

• describe what you enjoyed about the course
• say how much cooking you've done since the course
• suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir,

i am writing this letter regarding my cooking program that i recently completed at your college.

To explain,it was 6 monthes course and i attended it on regular basis. during the course i spent time with other students and we discuss our ideas with each-other regarding different dishes and it was really sense of humor.Also i made few friend.

these days i am working as a cheif at a Restaurent named cooper chimney.Its five star hotel and i have been prepaing many dishes such as butter chicken,rice pudding,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under-length, containing only 90 words compared to the minimum requirement of 150 words. Because of this severe limitation, the bullet points are not fully addressed or developed. While the writer mentions enjoying the course and gives a vague reference to their current cooking activities, the third bullet point regarding a suggestion for another cookery course is entirely missing. This results in a failure to cover all parts of the task adequately. Consequently, the task achievement is heavily constrained by the lack of content and word count.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is organized into brief paragraphs, but the overall logical progression is weak due to the very short length and fragmented sentences. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate, such as starting a new sentence with 'To explain,it was...' without proper spacing or punctuation. Referencing is basic, and the lack of a conclusion or proper sign-off in the letter further disrupts the standard structure required for General Training Task 1 correspondence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical resource is basic and limited. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'program', 'dishes', and 'hotel', but there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'monthes' instead of 'months', 'cheif' instead of 'chef', and 'Restaurent' instead of 'restaurant'. Collocations are occasionally awkward, such as 'it was really sense of humor' to describe the classroom atmosphere. These errors reflect a limited vocabulary control suited for a lower band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

Grammatical control is weak, featuring a limited range of sentence structures. There are several punctuation and capitalization errors, such as a lowercase 'i' used as a personal pronoun, missing spaces after commas (e.g., 'explain,it'), and unfinished sentences ending abruptly with a comma like 'butter chicken,rice pudding,'. Basic sentences are mixed with simple connectors, but frequent mechanical errors cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a higher score.

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