Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter

• describe what you enjoyed about the course
• say how much cooking you've done since the course
• suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir,

I really enjoyed this course and learned many things about cooking . tutor is very helpful and experiened. we cook everyday diffierent items like paste ,samosas, burger and pizza etc. when i try first time cooking in this course.i was very slow and didn have full knowledge about cooking but our teachers are very friendly to help us in every difficult time . at course time i get many things about how live in sharing rooms and with friendly because i am only child in our house and i get many problems at the being the course.

First week we do only study about what kind of material we use to cook the item. teacher teach us every single thing because they said u have to learn every single item that how much quality you have to put in your dish . after first week we start cooking and i get so much problems at the being the cooking because at house i never try to make any type of dish,but i never get my feeling low or loss the hope i try every single double to triple times .at the last week of couse there is exam also i that exam they the all students dish who make the best dish and that person will the win . exam day i was very awere about the what item i can make then i make paste and that was very tastey every one like and i win the couse .

I suggest everyone who want to become the best cook they can jion the couse because this couse duration is 2 months and i thing if i become the best cook then any one become the best and i mostly like offer my schools student who have probelm make item .

thank you,

Harsimran singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You communicate enthusiasm for the course and include relevant details, such as learning about ingredients, cooking pasta, and winning the final exam. However, the letter does not clearly cover two key points: how much cooking you have done since the course, and what specific new course you would like the school to offer. The final paragraph recommends the course to other students rather than suggesting a course for the school to run. Much of the response describes events during the two-month course, so the requested feedback is only minimally addressed. To improve, state plainly how often you have cooked since finishing and name a course you would like, such as a baking or vegetarian cookery course.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response moves from general enjoyment to the course experience and then to a closing recommendation. The account of the first week, later cooking lessons, and final exam gives the reader a basic sequence. However, the long middle paragraph contains several different ideas, including learning to live with others, struggling to cook, and the exam, without clear separation. Connections between ideas are often repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “because” and “and,” and some references are difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for what you enjoyed, cooking since the course, and your suggested future course. Clearer linking phrases and shorter sentences would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “tutor,” “cooking,” “dish,” and “exam,” and you give examples of foods prepared. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the letter difficult to understand, such as “paste” for “pasta,” “experiened,” and “tastey.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, including “get my feeling low” and “every single double to triple times.” Aim for accurate, natural expressions that describe your experience precisely, such as “I kept practising” or “I cooked several times a week.” Proofreading spelling and choosing familiar collocations carefully would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining that you had little cooking experience but kept trying. This shows some effort to go beyond short, simple statements. However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors in tense, agreement, articles, and punctuation frequently make the message hard to follow. For instance, “we cook everyday” and “teacher teach us” do not use the correct verb forms, while “when i try first time cooking in this course” is an incomplete clause. Capitalisation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check past-tense forms when describing the course.

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