Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter

• describe what you enjoyed about the course
• say how much cooking you've done since the course
• suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my greatest gratitude for giving me an opportunity to work with an amazing director like you. I like everything you told us;all the tips and tricks for cooking and baking.Mostly I enjoyed the notes you made us write on the recipe book which are actually on my finger tips.I enjoy cooking eversince and my family loves whatever I cook.I miss your voice though while cooking and sometimes I even smile when I make silly mkstakes;they remind how you used to scold me in the class.

I cook almost everyday and mostly I cook desi and chinese as per requested by my family.I follow the cookbook you gave each of us before starting cooking.

I would really love to be a part of your course again as the taste I have developed is spectacular. I'd suggest to start a course for Italian cuisine as people have been loving pastas all over the world;I really want to learn the skills to knead the dough follwed by cutting it into strips and cook to perfection and this is only achievable if you start this course and allow me to become a part of it as well.

I shall be very thankful.

Yours sincerely,

xyz

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you describe enjoying the instructor’s tips and recipe-book notes, explain that you cook almost every day, and suggest an Italian cuisine course. The purpose is clear and the personal details make the feedback relevant. The cooking frequency is stated directly, but the course suggestion is more fully developed than the account of what you enjoyed: several sentences focus on missing the instructor and recalling being scolded, rather than explaining which course activities were especially useful. The request for a new course is clear, though its benefits could be explained more specifically. The warm tone is appropriate, but “Dear Sir” does not follow the supplied opening; use “Dear Sir or Madam” to match the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: appreciation and course experience come first, followed by your cooking since the course and then a suggestion for a future class. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these points, and phrases such as “I cook almost every day” make the second section easy to follow. Some connections are less smooth, however. The shift from describing useful notes to saying you miss the instructor’s voice is abrupt, and the final paragraph combines your enthusiasm, the popularity of pasta, and detailed learning goals in one long sentence. Separate these ideas and use clearer links between them. The closing is appropriate, but the letter would feel more consistently organised if each paragraph focused on one task point.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a personal feedback letter, including relevant cooking terms such as “recipe book,” “knead the dough,” and “Italian cuisine.” Phrases like “tips and tricks” and “spectacular” communicate enthusiasm, although some choices are informal or imprecise for writing to a course director. There are also spelling and word-choice slips, including “mkstakes,” “follwed,” and “on my finger tips” (more naturally, “at my fingertips”). “Desi and Chinese” may be unclear to an international reader; naming the cuisines more precisely would improve clarity. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and a slightly more measured tone while retaining your personal warmth.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including the relative clause in “the notes you made us write” and the conditional idea in “if you start this course.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical and punctuation errors reduce accuracy. For example, “I enjoy cooking eversince” shifts tense awkwardly after describing the course; “I have enjoyed cooking ever since” would fit better. In “they remind how you used to scold me,” the clause needs “me of how,” and “as per requested by my family” has an incorrect grammatical pattern. Several sentences also run together after full stops or semicolons without appropriate spacing or punctuation. Review tense consistency, clause structure, and sentence boundaries.

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