Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, everyone is busy to make money while proforming more ther 1 job at same time, and it is consider by few individuals that if they have good bank balance then their like will be more comfertable and happy. To be honest with alot of money people can buy house,car and other luxery good But money is not every thing beause spend in with loved ones, do exercise and so things also make aperson happy.

On the one hand, with good finacial status people keep their self happy beacuse they can do or buy what ever they want. For example, buying a big house with all facilities , luxery car, shoping of big band clothing give happyness to some people because owing to that thay show their life style to others. which needs lot of money honestly. As result, we can say happy is come form money.

On the other hand,there are so many other thing with give people stress free and happy life like, speanding time with person whom we lovwe alot and do some activities which make us not only physical fit but also improve our mental heath. For intence, if a person body id fit and they donot have any disease or stress of any thing like waht will happen in future which is real happyness which not come for money. It is happen when we share our problem with our closest person they give use solution and make us stress free.

In conclusion, It is clear by above writen that even though few people believe that happeness come from good bank balance but we can ignmore that spend time with friend and good mental and physical also bring satisfaction in people life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: you explain that money can provide a house, a car and other purchases, and you identify relationships, exercise, and physical and mental health as other sources of happiness. Your position—that money can help but is not the only route to happiness—is clear in the introduction and conclusion. The examples about buying luxury goods and sharing problems with close people are relevant. However, the explanation of how money creates happiness focuses mainly on possessions and showing status, while the non-financial sources are more briefly listed than developed. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits behind each example—for instance, how financial security reduces worry—and support the ideas with more specific reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, two body paragraphs contrasting money with other sources of happiness, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” make the main progression easy to follow. Within paragraphs, however, some links are mechanical or unclear. For example, “As result, we can say happy is come form money” does not clearly follow from the preceding point about displaying a lifestyle, and the final sentence combines several ideas without showing their relationship precisely. Use clearer references and connect each example explicitly to the claim it supports. More varied transitions and better-controlled sentence boundaries would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “financial status,” “luxury car,” “mental health,” “stress-free,” and “satisfaction.” These choices help communicate the contrast between material and personal sources of happiness. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to read, such as “comfertable,” “happyness,” “owing” where “owning” is intended, and “finacial.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “good bank balance” and “big band clothing.” Aim to use accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, “financial security” and “designer clothes” would express these ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “even though” and a conditional idea beginning “if they have good bank balance.” The main meaning is generally recoverable, but some sentence structures and grammatical relationships are unclear. For example, “it is consider by few individuals” has an incorrect verb form, while “spend in with loved ones” does not form a clear grammatical clause. There are also issues with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “buy house,car” and the fragment beginning “which needs lot of money.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check verb forms and punctuation when joining clauses.

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