Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the modern era, money more useful a human life. money a important role a life of people. Because not imagine a life without a money. Lot of money make a people happy. I personally believed that money make a happy people. I will enuring upcomping paraghrbh.

To commence with, money a more neccesery all for need. Nowadays people want a lot of money. Because a nowadays people a more demand. More demand fullfill a lot with money. However people do the goveoment job and private job but earn a lot of money. Other more typs a earn the money. Lot of money people make a happy because lot of money they fullfill a demand and not thinking a buy the othe things. Nowadays people earn lot of money social media. Make the videos and upload the instagarm a youtube. Other people like a videos and come money your account.

On the other hand, when people made a happy earn the money but people not interest a other people and family. People all time focus a earn money not spend time with family and childern. Other things can make a people happy. people should a see a social activity and keep a round the world information. However money make a happy but people should a spend time yourself and understanding the family members.

To conclude after pondering over deal of delibertion and thoughts. Lot of money very important role a social life. But people a focus a family and physical health. Health is very neccecery a countine the life and health is well and its all okk.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both parts of the question: you explain that money can help people meet their demands and buy things, and you mention family, social activity, and health as other sources of happiness. Your position that money matters but is not everything is present, especially in the final paragraph. However, the ideas remain limited and are not consistently clear or developed. For example, the social-media example describes earning money by uploading videos, rather than explaining how this makes people happy, and the benefits of family time and health are only briefly stated. Develop each point with a clear explanation or relevant example, and make your view about the role of money explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, a paragraph about money, a paragraph about other sources of happiness, and a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression between and within ideas is often unclear, and linking words are sometimes used mechanically or inaccurately. For instance, “However” does not clearly show a contrast in “However people do the goveoment job and private job,” while repeated use of “Nowadays” and “a lot of money” makes the discussion feel repetitive. Some sentences are difficult to connect because their relationships are not explained. Use topic sentences and arrange each paragraph around one main idea, then link examples directly to that idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small range of topic-related vocabulary, including “demand,” “social activity,” “family members,” and “physical health,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, the vocabulary is limited and repetitive, and frequent errors in word choice, word forms, spelling, and collocation sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “money more useful a human life,” “fullfill a demand,” and “come money your account.” Several spellings, such as “neccesery,” “instagarm,” and “childern,” also reduce clarity. Build a bank of accurate phrases for discussing financial security and wellbeing, and check spelling and collocations. More precise wording would help you explain how money and relationships affect happiness.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic connectors, but most sentence patterns are simple, and attempts to combine ideas are often faulty. Errors with articles, verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction occur frequently, as in “money a important role a life of people” and “Lot of money make a people happy.” The sentence “people should a spend time yourself” also shows problems with verb structure and pronoun use. These errors can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “because” and “although.” Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete sentence structure.

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