Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Not all things in life can be bought by money. Many individuals feel that having enormous amount of money is the key to happiness in life. Indeed it brings a lot of comfort in a persons life but it is not the only thing that can bring happiness.

Everyone is working hard to live a rich and comfortable life. Undoubtedly, money makes life easier like if a person wants to buy anything branded or expensive then they do not have to think much. Additionally, it gives them the freedom to do their work passionately as all the other day to day tasks will be taken care of by their workers such as driving, cleaning, diet and the househelp. For instance, such individuals tend to live a pleasant life and also make great memories in their lifespan with their families than their counterparts.

Besides this, numerous other things are there which makes person more happier then only money. Healthy relationship, professional work, pleasant sleep, and a peaceful living are some of the things that can not be bought with money. Moreover, Living for others like for the people in your community, doing social work like uplifting the poor by providing help as well as being a better and king human being. To illustrate, volunteering for disabled children is such a noble thing to do, significant number of people nowadays are helping them with their educational needs thus giving them the opportunity to live a better life ahead.

To conclude, happiness can not be bought by anyone, people living in small houses often are seen living joyously. Lastly, inner peace and satisfaction with whatever anyone has is the utmost vital thing to have a great life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: how money contributes to happiness and other factors that lead to fulfillment. The position is clear throughout. The ideas are relevant, though some development is slightly superficial. For instance, the explanation of how money provides freedom is logical, but the transition to the second body paragraph could be more nuanced. The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points. To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide more specific, real-world examples rather than general statements, as this would demonstrate a deeper exploration of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Besides this', and 'To illustrate', which help the flow. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing (e.g., 'such individuals' in the second paragraph refers back to a group that was not explicitly defined). Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer to their antecedents would enhance the overall cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'passionately', 'counterparts', and 'joyously'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'king human being' (likely a typo for 'kind') and 'makes person more happier' (which is grammatically redundant). While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, the precision is occasionally lacking. To improve, focus on using collocations more accurately and proofreading for small spelling errors that can distract the reader from your otherwise clear arguments.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'Not all things in life can be bought by money' (passive voice usage is slightly awkward here), 'a persons life' (missing apostrophe), and 'lifespan' (used incorrectly in context). Additionally, there are subject-verb agreement issues, such as 'numerous other things are there which makes person'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on punctuation, specifically apostrophes and pluralization, will significantly improve your accuracy.

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