Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In todays fast world many people are talking about [introduce tha topic]this essay will look at all tha important

aspects.of it and i will discuss it with explain to prove my points

Bp1

Firstly tha main reason behind this topic is[present tha first main point]by applying this conceptit will surely help society and common people for axamle according to tha new artical.by times india.it helped more than 60%.people.

Bp2

moreovertha secound most important reason is [introduce tha secound main point]for example to explain this point. additionally tha given reson shows why this point is signficant

BP3

However'some people think oppositeto this oppinion. but i am still in tha favorr and explain.why this is not tha whole story.it is impotant to consider different views.

Conclusion;

to sum it up.tha topic of is important as shown by tha point discussed.its clear that tha given arguments are important.going forward people must foloow this because it will benefit people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to address the prompt effectively. It uses placeholders like '[introduce tha topic]' and 'Bp1' instead of providing actual content, which means the task is not addressed. Furthermore, the response is significantly under the 250-word minimum, reaching only 155 words. Because the ideas are not developed and the prompt is not answered, the response does not meet the requirements for a passing band score. To improve, you must write original content that directly answers the specific questions asked in the prompt, rather than using structural templates.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay lacks logical progression and cohesion. The use of labels like 'Bp1', 'Bp2', and 'BP3' disrupts the flow of the text and indicates a lack of understanding of essay structure. There is no clear paragraphing, and the transition between ideas is non-existent. The text relies on mechanical, repetitive phrases that do not serve to connect ideas logically. To improve, you should focus on writing full, coherent paragraphs with clear topic sentences and supporting arguments, using linking words like 'furthermore' or 'consequently' naturally rather than as placeholders.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is extremely limited and repetitive. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'todays', 'tha', 'axamle', 'artical', 'secound', 'reson', 'signficant', 'oppositeto', 'oppinion', 'favorr', 'impotant', and 'foloow'. The reliance on placeholders instead of substantive vocabulary prevents the demonstration of a range of language. To improve, you need to expand your vocabulary related to the topic of money and happiness and focus on accurate spelling and word choice.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The grammatical control is very weak. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and capitalization. Many sentences are fragments or run-on sentences, such as 'In todays fast world many people are talking about [introduce tha topic]this essay will look at all tha important aspects.of it'. The lack of proper punctuation and the misuse of periods within sentences make the text difficult to read. To improve, you must focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice correct punctuation usage.

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