Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In this world, people make efforts and find multiple ways to stay Happy. However, some individuals argue that to be joyful in life, you need a lot of money because money can provide or purchase everything that helps to stay happy. I personally believe that some people are happy because they have a healthy life and good relationships with their family and friends.
To begin with, money has become a valuable need for people to fulfill most people's needs. Not only can people buy luxurious items, but they can also live a wealthy life. Moreover people can live their dream life by earning lots of money by putting in their time and continued effort. For example, the richest person in India, Mr. Dhirubhai Ambani, has a net worth of 105 billion, has one of the biggest houses in India with 73 storeys, and has a collection of more than 500 rare cars. Therefore, he and his family are enjoying a happy life.
On the other hand, although money can buy costly things, money can not buy a person respect and health. A writer can stay happy by writing well-known books; likewise, individuals can be happy by achieving their self-esteem and self-actualization in the world. Furthermore, many people are not happy because they do not have good health, but others with no money are still happy with good health. For Instance, as per Abhram Maslow Law, he mentions in his law that people were still unhappy after earning a good amount of money because they have not achieved their goals and passions.
In conclusion, I agree that having good amount of money people can stay happy by buying such things however, achieving their goals and fol
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both the role of money in happiness and alternative factors. The position is clear throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. The example of Mr. Dhirubhai Ambani is relevant but slightly over-detailed, while the reference to Maslow’s hierarchy is a good attempt at depth but lacks clarity in its application to the argument. The conclusion is incomplete, which impacts the overall task completion. To reach a higher band, ensure that all arguments are fully extended and that the essay reaches a complete, well-rounded conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with,' 'Moreover,' and 'On the other hand' are used to link ideas effectively. However, there are instances where the flow is slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally imprecise. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two main aspects of the prompt. The abrupt ending of the final sentence significantly disrupts the coherence of the conclusion, which prevents a higher score in this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task. You use some topic-specific terms like 'luxurious items,' 'self-esteem,' and 'self-actualization.' However, there is some repetition of basic words like 'happy' and 'money.' Some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'valuable need' or 'earning lots of money by putting in their time.' To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations and a wider variety of synonyms to express the concept of wealth and well-being, and ensure that word forms are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While many sentences are clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'having good amount of money people can stay happy' (missing articles and awkward phrasing) and 'as per Abhram Maslow Law, he mentions' (redundant subject). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor errors in comma usage. The majority of your sentences are understandable, and errors do not impede communication, but a greater variety of error-free complex structures is needed to move into the 7.0 band.
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