Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

As per "MONEY" this ward define most think with matching currently situations, Have any precious time don't use your ideas with other decision. Money change people, but don't in happy to have a lot of money.

Money measures to all people happy or not, they don't take a simulate the game changes. If you have lots of money, but you haven't time to give for charity and donate who handicaps persons, Government decide the best beautiful trust create and build your think ways.

If you have a lot of money to take decision our family education for the future plans out of country for the great idea, new expensive car o bike, purchase the ideological more for your luxurious life.

Mostly, if happy for the things of paying or donate the thinks new in mind. you can make people happy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 140 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address the prompt by discussing money and charity, the arguments are fragmented and lack the necessary depth and supporting examples required for a higher band. The position is unclear, and the response is too brief to fully explore the complexities of the topic. To improve, you must expand on your points with specific examples and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full development of your ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there are paragraph breaks, the ideas within them do not flow logically, and the connections between sentences are often confusing or absent. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas together, making the text feel disjointed. For example, the transition between discussing charity and family education is abrupt and lacks a clear thematic link. To improve, focus on using transition words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates back to the main prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. Many phrases are non-standard or misused, such as 'define most think with matching currently situations' and 'simulate the game changes'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly. To improve, you should focus on learning common collocations and using words in their correct context. Avoid trying to use overly complex or abstract phrases if you are not confident in their meaning, as this leads to confusion for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that make it difficult to understand the intended meaning. There are significant issues with sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and word order. For instance, 'Money measures to all people happy or not' and 'donate who handicaps persons' are grammatically incorrect. The essay relies on simple, often fragmented sentences, and there is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and the proper use of articles and prepositions.

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