Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowdays, money he is very important role in our life to live in happy atmosphere becuase todays relations are mostly depend on money if we have money then every one talk with us ,without money people are like to make new friends but money is also main role to broken our relation with familys and friends

To begin with, people are race of making the money and compare every person with oun money if person have money they will friend that indivdaul who has money and talk with happy and most other thing is that person intivte in their family functions. money is the key of happiness in our life because money can make happy and give us id that this guy have everything.

In other side , money is most important thing which broken our relation because people are only one goals in their life , in which forget to give time to our family and their friend .money has good thing but money is not give everythings which we need in our life. our familys are most important from everyone .give time to family and friend . go with friend or family member at dinner or do other item in which family ,friend and we also can get some rest from thing race of money.

To conclusion, acorrding to me i thing money is important but side by side our family meber and friends or our relative is important in our life .so i thing we have to take both equal in which person make money and give time to his family.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both parts of the question: you suggest that money can attract social attention and invitations, and you identify family and friends as other sources of happiness. Your view that money matters but should be balanced with relationships is also present, especially in the conclusion. However, the explanation of how money itself creates happiness remains limited; for example, “this guy have everything” is asserted rather than explained or supported with a specific example. The discussion of relationships is more developed, but some points are unclear and repeated. To strengthen the response, explain practical benefits of wealth, such as security or access to opportunities, and support each main idea with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an identifiable beginning, two main discussion sections, and a conclusion, so the reader can recognise its broad structure. You also use basic signposting such as “To begin with,” “In other side,” and “To conclusion.” However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: ideas about money, friendship, and family are joined together without clear links, and several points are repeated. The contrast between money’s benefits and its effect on relationships could be organised more clearly, with each paragraph focused on one central idea. Use linking expressions to show cause, contrast, and examples accurately, and make references such as “this guy” or “their friend” clearer so the reader can follow who is being discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words, including “money,” “happiness,” “family,” “friends,” and “important,” which keeps the general topic recognisable. There are also attempts to express ideas such as social comparison and the “race of money.” However, vocabulary is limited and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice problems sometimes make meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “relations are mostly depend on money” and “money is the key of happiness” are not natural collocations. Build a wider range of topic vocabulary and learn common word partnerships, then check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise expressions would help distinguish financial security from social status and personal relationships.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “because” and “if,” and you use some simple sentence forms to state your opinion. However, the range of structures is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, which can make the reader work to understand the meaning. Examples include “if we have money then every one talk with us” and “money is not give everythings”; these show problems with verb forms and agreement. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, with several ideas run together. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause at a time. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and verb forms when revising.

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