Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Mr. Atif,

I hope this finds you well. I am one of the lucky ones who attended concert at the Grand Hall last week. I am absolutely flattered to finally able to attend a live musical event especially the amazing session of yours.

I, alongwith my friends really enjoyed your songs, specially the one at the end "Rocky". It had the best set of drums and tones I have heard in a very long time. The control you had with different levels of sounds and variations, were very well balanced and I could not find a single person who did not enjoy that song.

To be honest, I tried to reproduce the same theme myself, but could not develop it properly. I sometimes like to sing in a similar style as a hobby, though I consider myself an amateur. I was wondering if you could make some time to meet online for one session, to guide me how to improve, at the time of your choosing of course.

I look forward to hearing from you and our sessions.

Yours sincerely,

Saif Saleem

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

You address all three points clearly: you praise the performance, describe your own singing as a hobby, and ask for an online session to help you improve. Specific details such as the concert at the Grand Hall, the song “Rocky,” and your attempt to reproduce its theme make the letter personal and relevant. Your request is polite and gives the singer flexibility about timing. To make the ideas more fully developed, explain briefly what musical activities you currently do—for example, how often you sing or whether you practise with your friends—and specify what kind of guidance you hope to receive. The response is already well focused; a little more detail about your activities would make the purpose of the letter even clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.5

The letter has a clear progression: you introduce the concert, describe what you enjoyed, explain your own musical interest, and then make your request. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and phrases such as “To be honest” and “I was wondering if” help connect the personal background to the request. The closing is also appropriate for a formal, polite letter. To make the organisation still smoother, link the description of the song more directly to your own attempt to reproduce its theme, so the transition between those ideas feels less abrupt. You could also avoid repeating the idea of enjoyment across the first two paragraphs by making each paragraph’s focus more distinct.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for a personal letter, including “absolutely flattered,” “variations,” “reproduce,” and “amateur.” These choices help convey enthusiasm and your musical interest, and the meaning remains clear throughout. Some word choices and collocations are less natural, however: “attended concert” needs an article, while “the best set of drums and tones” and “levels of sounds” do not express the musical qualities precisely. “Flattered” also usually describes feeling honoured by someone’s attention, rather than being pleased to attend a concert. Aim for more idiomatic phrasing and precise musical terms, such as describing the drum arrangement, tone, or sound levels. This would make your vocabulary more flexible and accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the relative clause “who attended…” and the conditional-style polite request, “I was wondering if you could…”. Most sentences communicate your meaning clearly, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, write “attended the concert” and “to finally be able to attend”; “alongwith” should be separated as “along with,” and “the control … and variations were” does not need a comma before the verb. In “I look forward to hearing from you and our sessions,” the structure is incomplete because “hearing from you” and “our sessions” do not fit together grammatically. Review articles, verb agreement, and parallel sentence structures, while continuing to use varied sentence patterns.

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