Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear Mr.Kamal,

I am writing this letter to express my feeling about the last concert which is helo at Vancouver, Rogers arena date 12 November, 2026. I was very existed to see you because you are my fevorite singer and I always preferd to listen your music.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 2.5

The letter begins appropriately and makes its purpose clear: you want to express your feelings about the singer’s performance. However, it does not yet address the other two required points: there are no details about your own musical activities and no explanation of how the singer could help you. Even your praise is only briefly stated, with “you are my favorite singer” and a general reference to enjoying his music; you do not describe what you liked about the performance. The response is also substantially below the required minimum length, leaving the task only minimally addressed. To improve, develop each bullet point with specific details and a clear request for assistance.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The opening has a clear purpose, and the ideas follow a basic sequence: you identify the concert and then say how you feel about the singer. This gives the short response some organisation. However, there is no paragraph development or progression beyond these opening details, and the letter stops before moving to your musical activities or request for help. The sentence about the concert also packs several details together, making the information less easy to follow. Use separate sentences or paragraphs for your reaction, your own musical experience, and your request, with simple links such as “In addition” and “I would also like to ask.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a few relevant expressions, including “concert,” “favorite singer,” and “listen to your music,” so the reader can identify the topic and your positive attitude. However, the vocabulary range is very limited because the response is so brief, and several spelling or word-choice errors reduce accuracy: “helo,” “existed,” “fevorite,” and “preferd.” “Express my feeling” is also less natural than “express my admiration” or “tell you how much I enjoyed your performance.” Add precise language describing what impressed you, such as the singer’s voice, stage presence, or song choices, and use vocabulary related to your own musical activities and the help you hope to receive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response uses a basic sentence pattern to communicate its purpose and a simple reason for writing. However, the range is narrow, and errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms are noticeable. In “the last concert which is helo at Vancouver,” the relative clause is not formed correctly; a clearer version would be “the concert held at Rogers Arena in Vancouver.” The phrase “I always preferd to listen your music” needs a correct verb form and the preposition “to”: “I have always preferred listening to your music.” Punctuation and spacing also need attention, as in “Mr.Kamal.” Practise combining accurate simple sentences with a few controlled complex structures.

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