Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear John,

I hope you are well. This email is about the recent muscial concert which happened at last night. I have seen a good singers in that concert. Where i am very much attracked to one of the singer his name is Alex from India. I want to share some of the things about him in this email.

Firstly, i feel his performance is like a rockstar. Mainly, voice of his tone he changed in between the songs and drums they used was super, i never seen this kind of activity.

Moreover, they used the various musical activity while the performance is going on. Especially, the way of sound system was about killing the ears.

Furthermore, I personally want him to get a good musical opportunities in further for that i need your help and encourage him further.

I hope this email finds you well.

Thanking you.

Regards,

Sumanth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The letter conveys admiration for the singer, especially in “his performance is like a rockstar,” and mentions aspects of the show such as his changing voice and the drums. However, the response only minimally fulfils the task: it is unclear whether the singer being praised is John or Alex, and the details of your own musical activities are not provided. The request for help is also vague; “I need your help and encourage him further” does not explain what support you want or how it would assist your activities. To make the message more complete, describe your own music-making and ask for a specific form of help, such as advice, lessons, or feedback.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence, moving from an introduction to comments on the performance and then a request, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Moreover,” and “Furthermore” show an attempt to organise ideas. However, these transitions feel mechanical, and the ideas do not develop into a clear overall progression. The paragraph beginning “Moreover” is difficult to follow because it refers to “various musical activity” without explaining what happened, while the final request is not clearly connected to the writer’s own activities. The repeated opening and closing pleasantries also take space without advancing the message. Group the performance details together, then explain your own musical involvement before making a specific request.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate general enthusiasm, with phrases such as “performance,” “voice,” “drums,” and “sound system.” However, the range is limited and several choices or combinations are inaccurate or unclear, which can make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. For example, “a good singers” and “musical opportunities in further” are not natural expressions, while “killing the ears” gives an unintended negative impression in a letter praising a performance. “Musical activity” is also repeated without specifying what the writer does. Use more precise language for the performance and your own musical interests, such as describing the singer’s vocal range or explaining that you play an instrument or perform.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response uses mostly short, simple statements and attempts a few longer structures, but control is uneven. Errors in sentence construction and verb forms appear in examples such as “the recent muscial concert which happened at last night” and “I never seen this kind of activity.” The sentence beginning “Where i am very much attracked” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence, and the clause about the singer’s name is also awkwardly attached. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including lowercase “i” and the comma splice in “Firstly, i feel his performance is like a rockstar. Mainly, voice of his tone…” Practise complete sentences and accurate past-tense forms, and use punctuation to separate related ideas clearly.

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