Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear singer,

I visited your cincert which was held in Thunder bay n last week. This concert is remeber in my life time memory. I am so glad that I enjoyed a concert.

I liked your singing and vocal. When you are singing a hindi bolloywood song I truly adire that nobody can else did this level of singing. when your beats suddenly go from zero to high it was made convience to sing with you. The group who was dancing behind you, they were dancing very well. The lighting on the stage fantasticly arraged. In the beggaing, I feel like I would be tired because your are singing old bollywood song, that's not my taste. after few songs, when you were playing my favourite song like " chudi jo khanke bago mein...." I felt like I am in heven. Moreover, in the background, artists were plaing garba.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You clearly express enjoyment of the concert, describing the singing, dancing, lighting and your reaction to a favourite song. However, the letter addresses only the first bullet point. It gives no details about your own musical activities and does not explain what help you would like from the singer, so two important parts of the task are missing. The response also falls two words short of the required 150-word minimum. To make the letter complete, add specific information about an instrument, group or practice routine, then make a clear request—for example, asking for advice, a lesson or feedback on your singing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a generally understandable sequence: it introduces the concert, comments on the performance, and then describes particular moments. Connectors such as “Moreover” and “after few songs” help show how the account develops. However, the ideas are presented in one main block, and the letter stops without a closing or a transition to your own musical activities and request. Some links are awkward or unclear, such as “When you are singing” followed by “when your beats suddenly go from zero to high.” Use separate paragraphs for your reaction, your musical background, and your request, and make the relationship between each detail explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a live performance, including “vocal,” “lighting,” “stage,” “artists” and “garba,” and the favourite-song detail makes the response personal. The range is nevertheless limited, and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “cincert,” “remeber,” “adire” and “convience.” Some expressions are also unnatural, including “life time memory” and “nobody can else did this level of singing.” Check spelling carefully and choose more natural collocations. More precise language for your own musical activities and the assistance you want would also help you communicate the full purpose of the letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a sentence beginning “When you are singing,” and the main message can usually be followed. However, control is inconsistent, particularly in longer constructions. For example, “When you are singing a hindi bolloywood song I truly adire that nobody can else did this level of singing” has problems with tense, word order and sentence structure. “I feel like I would be tired” and “I felt like I am in heven” also show inconsistent tense choices. Practise forming complete sentences with consistent past-tense narration, and check articles, agreement and punctuation. Breaking long sentences into shorter, correctly structured ones will make your meaning clearer.

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