Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Arijit singh,

How are you ? i hope you are doing fentastic. recently i went to you music concert at mumbai vankhede stadium. Oh my God! that was such a mind blowing concert i have ever attended. I can not express my happiness in my words.

I want to explain you that your show started at 9:30 pm

but i have arrived at 8 o clock over there with office collegues.

Music plays an important role in my life. I enjoy listening to different types of music like punjabi, bollywood and international music.

Dear Arijit, I was so excited to attend your show from long period and finaly i got that chance. You played a wonderfull instrument and sung amazing songs. you just won the millions of hearts that night.

I want to express you some musical prominent advise with you. beacause you were using guitar mostlly all the time so i want that you have to learn fluiet and litlle bit play with drum. It will enhace to shine your concert more.

thanks.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main points by praising the concert, describing your interest in music, and asking the singer to add flute and drums to his performances. Details such as attending with office colleagues and arriving before the show make the letter personal. However, the request is not clearly connected to your own musical activities: you say you enjoy listening to music, but do not explain whether you sing, play an instrument, or take part in a group. The advice about his instrument choices also sounds more like a suggestion for improving his concert than a request for help. Develop your musical activities and state specifically how he could support them.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a recognisable sequence: it introduces the concert, describes your musical interests, and then makes a suggestion. Some details, including the arrival time, are relevant but interrupt the praise before the main ideas are fully developed. The second greeting, “Dear Arijit,” restarts the letter unnecessarily, while “I want to explain you” and “I want to express you” do not clearly signal the relationship between ideas. Paragraphing could more clearly separate your reaction, your own musical activities, and your request. Use straightforward transitions and keep each paragraph focused on one purpose to create a clearer overall progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some expressive language to convey enthusiasm, including “mind blowing concert,” “won the millions of hearts,” and “important role in my life.” The vocabulary is adequate for the topic, but several spelling and word-choice errors make parts less clear or natural, such as “fentastic,” “collegues,” “prominent advise,” and “enhace.” Some combinations are also awkward: “played a wonderful instrument” does not clearly describe the performance, and “international music” is broad. Choose precise words for musical activities and requests, and check spelling and common collocations. This would make your praise and suggestions sound more fluent and convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate through mostly simple sentences and make some attempts to link ideas, for example, “because you were using guitar mostlly all the time so i want…” However, this construction is faulty because it combines “because” and “so,” and the sentence is difficult to follow. Errors in sentence boundaries and punctuation also occur, as in “your show started at 9:30 pm but i have arrived at 8 o clock.” There are repeated problems with capitalisation and sentence openings, including lowercase “i” and “you.” Use a wider mix of accurately formed sentences, check tense consistency when describing the concert, and punctuate each complete thought clearly.

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