Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Roshan

Recently, I have visited your concert in Canada, it was interesting. I am your super fan as well as i see your all playlists and even always agar to listen to your new songs.

my dream is to become a singer and trying tom improve my voice . however I am unable to identify my week points

My dream is to work on my voice to become a successful singer. Moreover, i also want someone to assist me in such activities. I have all musical instruments.

However, I do not have knowledge to make proper use of it. it is my humble request can you utilize some time from your busy schedule to train me.

i will be very thankful of you. i read about your struggle which motivates me to take the steps forward to my dream

There is only one line which gives me motivation too :

Anything is possible if a person has a will power to do it.

Thank you

Muskan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: your feelings about the concert, your musical background, and your request for help. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention you have musical instruments, you do not specify which ones or what kind of music you play, which would have made the letter more engaging. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a singer, though it lacks the polish expected in a formal or semi-formal request. To improve, ensure that each point is expanded with specific details to fully satisfy the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into short paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical or repetitive. For instance, you use 'However' and 'Moreover' to start sentences, but the flow between ideas could be smoother. Some sentences, such as 'I am your super fan as well as i see your all playlists', feel disjointed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would help improve the logical progression of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is quite basic and contains some inaccuracies. For example, you use 'visited your concert' (should be 'attended') and 'week points' (should be 'weak points'). You also use 'agar' instead of 'eager'. While your meaning is clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there are noticeable errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally distract the reader. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise terminology related to music and performance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Common issues include capitalization errors (e.g., 'i' instead of 'I'), subject-verb agreement, and incorrect word order, such as 'i see your all playlists'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the overall accuracy score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for capitalization will significantly improve your writing.

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