Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this to express my feelings about the concert that took place in RBC convention center on 28 July. I went with my friends and cousins and it was best concert of my life that i had attended till now.

The performance was full of energy and ethusiasum which created a very good environment in that hall. I attended this show on my cousins advice as he is a big fan of your singing as a result to this, I loved this show as it was very fun watching you performing live. It went beyond our expectations.

Moreover, beyond the performance there were many musical activities such sessions of many musical instruments. I need your help in learning guitar as i see you as my mentor and i also has a dream of performing on big stage and gaining fame from my skill.

Thank you for your time and consideration

Yours faithfully

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly express your feelings about the performance, mention your musical activities, and explain how you would like the singer to help you. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a performer. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, the description of your musical activities is quite brief and could have been expanded to provide more context. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is elaborated upon with more specific detail, which would help in creating a more engaging and fully developed response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Moreover' and 'as a result', to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally a bit mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, though some transitions could be smoother to improve the overall progression of the text. The paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter, and the structure helps the reader follow your message without difficulty. Increasing the variety of linking words would further enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'enthusiasm', 'expectations', and 'consideration' correctly. There are some minor spelling errors, such as 'ethusiasum' instead of 'enthusiasm', and 'convention center' should ideally be capitalized as 'Convention Center'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the range of less common or more precise collocations that would be expected at a higher band level. Focusing on using more varied and sophisticated adjectives and verbs will help elevate your lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'it was best concert' (missing an article), 'i had attended' (tense choice), and 'i also has a dream' (subject-verb agreement). Additionally, the use of 'i' should always be capitalized as 'I'. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, pay closer attention to articles, subject-verb agreement, and consistent capitalization. Incorporating more complex sentence structures with greater accuracy will also help you achieve a higher band.

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