Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 7.0)
Dear Sumit,
I hope that you are doing well. I am writing to tell you about my feelings on your performance in the concert last week.
My feeling is amazing because you are not only my favorite singer, but also your voice is very clear to understand when you starts singing traditional and historical songs. Furthermore, your dressing style was very good that was matching to your performance.
I want to tell that I also have a keen desire in singing because I used to sing during my college days. I love to sing traditional music and I can paly some music instruments, such as guitar and flute.
As we live in the same area so I want you to tech me how to catch the rhythm so that I can sing traditional music without being nervous front of people. You are the master in playing drums if you can help me to teach this, I can play it during singing. It is easy for me to reach you because we live in same area.
I look forward to hearing your response.
Your sincerely
Sandeep
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5
The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly express your feelings about the performance, describe your musical background, and explain how you would like the singer to assist you. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a performer. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For example, while you mention your musical activities, expanding slightly more on your specific goals or the type of traditional music you enjoy would have provided a more comprehensive response. Overall, the task is fulfilled effectively, and the purpose of the letter is clear throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'As', and 'so' to link your ideas. While the paragraphing is appropriate, the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to avoid a slightly repetitive structure. Referencing is generally clear, and the progression of ideas from your appreciation of the concert to your personal musical interests and finally to your request for help is easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'keen desire', 'traditional', and 'rhythm'. There are some minor word choice issues, such as 'paly' (spelling error for 'play') and 'tech' (should be 'teach'). Additionally, phrases like 'my feeling is amazing' are slightly unnatural; 'I was incredibly impressed' would be more idiomatic. While you successfully communicate your meaning, the vocabulary is generally functional rather than sophisticated. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'when you starts singing' (subject-verb agreement), 'nervous front of people' (missing preposition 'in'), and 'we live in same area' (missing article). Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear and communication is not impeded. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures would also help elevate your score.
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