Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Diljit Dosanjh,

I am writing this letter to express my excitement which I experienced during your recent concert which was held in our local community.

Firstly, I would like to mention about your thrilling performance. It was an extra-ordinary and beyond my words. I really enjoyed throught the concert and did dance on my favourite song. I am truely immensed with your vocal. Now, I am also planning to get classes in singing profession. You inspired me alot and become my role model. I took some musical classes during my school life but discontinue it due to some reasons. I also sung songs during my college festival and now, I am ready to enhance my skill.

I would be really grateful to you if you give my advice on smooth singing. Moreover, I am flexible to meet you at any time if you allow me. With your guidance, I will be confident to persue my proffession in this stream.

I hope you would take my suggestion into your consideration and act accordingly.

Yours sincerely,

Arpan.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly express your appreciation for the performance, provide relevant details about your past musical background, and make a specific request for guidance. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a performer, and the purpose of the communication is clear throughout. To reach a higher band, you could expand slightly on the 'musical activities' section by describing the specific types of songs you sang or the nature of the classes you took, which would provide more depth to your ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'With your guidance', which help the flow of information. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly forced. To improve, ensure that the connection between sentences is smoother and that you vary your linking words more naturally to avoid a repetitive structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'thrilling performance', 'role model', and 'enhance my skill'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'I am truely immensed with your vocal' (should be 'impressed by your vocals') and 'get classes' (should be 'take classes'). Additionally, there are spelling errors like 'throught' instead of 'through' and 'persue' instead of 'pursue'. Focusing on accurate collocations and proofreading for spelling will help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader, such as 'I did dance on my favourite song' (unnecessary 'did'), 'discontinue it' (tense inconsistency), and 'give my advice' (should be 'give me advice'). While these errors do not prevent the message from being understood, they indicate a need for more careful control over verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Increasing the variety of complex structures while ensuring accuracy will improve your performance.

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