Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Ms Budal,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing this letter to you regarding your concert that was very well and in the end I enjoyed it a lot. Let me discuss bit more.

To begin with, I want to say in the concert I had been feeling amazing at and I believe that was one of your best performances of yours. Although all music is nice you were great last night so I decided to learn me if you have time because I want to follow your way.

Moreover, I have to say I have been training in an effort to learn to sing for about six years and during this time I can improve my knowledge and my ability. However, I think I must grow up more and more with your help. Please aim to me if you can spend time with me. For instance, I have a rich family and we can support you as sponsors and you help me to find my way as a teacher.

Writing to your reply.

Your Faithfully,

Saeed Foroughi.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the performance, musical background, and the request for help. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. The request for help is slightly awkward, particularly the suggestion of sponsorship, which feels a bit out of place in a fan letter. The tone is inconsistent; while it attempts a formal structure, the phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'Let me discuss bit more' and 'Please aim to me'. To improve, ensure that the purpose of the letter remains clear and the tone stays consistently professional throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'To begin with' and 'Moreover' are used, but the transitions between sentences within paragraphs are sometimes abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'I want to learn me', which makes the flow of ideas difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer to their antecedents would significantly enhance the coherence of the writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several instances of awkward word choice, such as 'grow up more' instead of 'develop my skills' and 'aim to me' instead of 'reach out to me'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic structures to convey meaning. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise collocations and idiomatic expressions appropriate for a formal letter, while avoiding literal translations from your native language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. Frequent errors in grammar and word order, such as 'I want to learn me' and 'I have been training in an effort to learn to sing', impede the clarity of the message. There are also issues with article usage and verb tense consistency. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors requires the reader to work harder to interpret the intended message. Focusing on basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement will help.

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