Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear arjit,

I would like to bring this to your attention that last week I attending your concert in Jalandhar. I really enjoyed the concert however, your performance among other singers were the best and was very heart touching for me.

I also have some interest in singing and take classes. Currently, im learning g form a local music teacher so that I could have some basic knowledge about salesman rhythm. My classes are 2 days in a week . 2 months before I had won one inter school singing completion as well.

After the event I researched about you, and came to known that you owns music learning school. I would appreciate if you would assist me for how can I join your classes and gets to opportunity to have teacher like you.

I would be so grateful, looking forward for your response.

Warm regards,

One of your fans.

Sofia

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: expressing your feelings about the performance, describing your musical background, and asking for help with your musical activities. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a singer, and the purpose is clear. However, some ideas are slightly underdeveloped; for example, the mention of 'salesman rhythm' is unclear and likely a vocabulary error, which slightly obscures your meaning. To improve, ensure that your explanations are precise and directly relevant to the request. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use basic cohesive devices like 'I also', 'After the event', and 'I would appreciate', which help the reader follow your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing and sentence structure that occasionally disrupt the natural progression of the text. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your transitions between paragraphs are smoother.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'heart touching', 'inter school singing completion', and 'appreciate'. However, there are several noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'salesman rhythm' (likely meaning 'sense of rhythm'), 'g form' (from), and 'owns music learning school' (owns a music school). These errors occasionally cause the reader to pause, though they do not prevent the overall message from being understood. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and proofreading for basic spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you successfully communicate your points, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('your performance... were', 'you owns'), verb tense issues ('I attending', '2 months before I had won'), and missing articles. These errors are noticeable but do not impede communication. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent throughout the letter. Practicing the use of complex sentences with correct punctuation will also help you achieve a higher score.

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