Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Shawn,

I am writing to let you know that I recently attended your concert which took place on 28th of July in scotia bank arena. I am so thankful that I got this wonderful opportunity as it was my first concert experience.

Also, your performance was excellent. As a audience we hardly see rockstars sing in their concert but you sang your heart out. Moreover, I noticed each and every person was feeling all the emotions as some were crying, some were singing and others were dancing with their partners.

Secondly, I wanted to let you know that I am running a small music school in Mississauga. We teach student pretty much everything from singing to playing all types of instruments. I have 150 students currently and 8 of them are trying hard to get a chance to work for a music video. I am attaching a video of them singing one of your recent hit. I wanted to request you to please listen to that video once and if you like that please give a chance to them to work for you. This one chance can change their life.

Thank you

Best Regards,

Kamya

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly express your appreciation for the performance, describe your music school in Mississauga, and make a specific request for the singer to review your students' video. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a public figure. The ideas are well-developed and relevant, providing enough detail to make the request feel genuine. To reach a higher band, you could expand slightly on the specific musical activities or the nature of the students' talent to further justify the request, but overall, the task requirements are fully met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Secondly', and 'Also' to transition between ideas. However, the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the transition between the concert experience and the music school feels more natural. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the overall structure is easy to follow, which is a key requirement for a coherent response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, such as 'opportunity', 'performance', and 'instruments'. There are some minor inaccuracies, such as 'As a audience' (should be 'As an audience') and 'recent hit' (should be 'recent hit song'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it is somewhat basic. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations or descriptive adjectives to convey your enthusiasm and professional background more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'sing in their concert' (should be 'sing at their concert'), 'teach student' (should be 'teach students'), and 'give a chance to them' (should be 'give them a chance'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage will help improve your accuracy. The punctuation is generally correct, and the letter format is well-maintained.

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