Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear karan,

I hope you are doing well. I am very glad to tell you that I attended your recent concert that was held in toronto canada.

I am your great fan since childhood and i always had a dream to visit your concert which I fulfilled last week. Your performance was super amazing. It was very energetic performance. Your concert was well organised . It was very well managed as per crowd .

Playing drums was one of the best activity i enjoyed as i also love playing drums. The beat was supper according to the flow of the song.

I always tried to learn playing drums on slow beats but i failed . I would love if you teach me how to use the sticks and how to play it on the slow beats . I know the faster beats but i found slow beats hards. Seeing you playing drums really motivates me to learn.

It will be an honour if you teach me . Hoping to hear from you soon.

Yours Sincerely,

Sehajgeet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly expressed your feelings about the performance, described your interest in playing the drums, and made a specific request for the singer's help. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a performer, and the purpose of the letter is clear throughout. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are slightly more developed; for instance, you could elaborate on why you find slow beats particularly challenging or describe your musical background in more detail to make the request feel more personal and convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the concert experience to your personal musical interests and finally to your request. Paragraphing is used, though it could be more distinct to separate the different stages of your message. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'I also' and 'I know', but the flow between sentences is occasionally a bit mechanical. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'Consequently', 'In addition to this') to connect your ideas more fluidly and improve the overall structure of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. You use some descriptive words like 'energetic' and 'motivated', which is positive. However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'super amazing' (which is informal and repetitive) and 'as per crowd' (which is unnatural). Additionally, there are minor spelling errors like 'supper' instead of 'super' and 'hards' instead of 'hard'. To improve, focus on using more precise adjectives and ensuring that your word choices sound natural in a formal or semi-formal context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. While your meaning is always clear, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. For example, there are issues with capitalization ('karan', 'toronto', 'canada', 'i'), subject-verb agreement, and article usage (e.g., 'I am your great fan' should be 'I am a great fan'). You also have some run-on sentences and minor errors in verb tense consistency. To reach a higher band, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly regarding capitalization and articles, and try to incorporate more varied sentence structures with greater precision.

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