Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Sir,
I had attend the concert that you conducted in the town hall of city of Cambridge on 30th July 2026. I am writing this letter to express how much I enjoyed your performance and which made my day happy. The energy you maintained overall the music night and your performance on guitar made me a huge fan of you.
I am very much passionate about the music and now just started learning guitar since six months ago. I am more concentrated on acoustic guitars and I get a chance to be a part of an upcoming film. Moreover, I have a you tube channel where I am posting my guitar videos which have numerous followers. I would like to request you to kindly check the channel named 'The Guitarist'.
I am little tensed about the upcoming film that I previously mentioned, because it is first time for me. I would be a big motivation, if you can give me some advice for my future and your are big inspiration for me to choose acoustic guitar.
Thank you for giving attention to this matter and I am super excited to attend your next concert.
Yours sincerely,
Jithu
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly expressed your enjoyment of the concert, described your musical background, and made a specific request for advice regarding your upcoming film project. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a performer, although the opening 'Dear Sir' is slightly formal given the context of a fan writing to a singer. The ideas are relevant and well-developed, providing enough detail to satisfy the requirements of the task. To reach a higher band, ensure that the connection between your musical activities and the specific help you are requesting is more explicitly linked.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on one of the required points. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'because', which help the flow of ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the progression between sentences could be smoother. For instance, the transition from discussing your YouTube channel to your anxiety about the film is slightly abrupt. Improving the use of linking phrases would help the text feel more natural and cohesive throughout.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. Phrases like 'very much passionate' and 'maintained overall the music night' are understandable but slightly unnatural in their collocation. You attempt to use some specific terminology related to music, such as 'acoustic guitars', which is good. To improve, focus on more precise word choices and natural collocations. For example, instead of saying 'made my day happy', you could use 'made my day' or 'was a highlight of my year'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I had attend' (should be 'I attended'), 'since six months ago' (should be 'for six months'), and 'your are big inspiration' (should be 'you are a big inspiration'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on verb tense consistency and article usage, as well as ensuring that subject-verb agreement is accurate in more complex sentences.
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