Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sir,
I am writing regarding the musical concert and feeling of happiness that i got during this quality time.I was enjoying the performance of my favourite singer. Obviously, that’s u.
Firstly, I want to tell my peace level at that time. I got struck into your lyrics. Moreover, the quality of sound such as, echo, pitch and frequency was very up to the mark.Due to this play I forgot all my problems of life at that time. You played such an important role in this concert. Additionally, it’s looks like people was waiting for your performance.
Secondly, I am deeply involved in the musical activities. I loved the singing from my childhood.Recently, I am involved in musical society and I am about to build my own band. In Future, I will perform at big stage. Furthermore, I love to play violin, guitar and I am also involved in pop music.
In the end, I need one favour from your side as a beginner I want to collaborate with u in this area of music. It is my humble request to u please accept my request from your end. Therefore, this effort will motivate a lot and helps to promote my talent to the global level from your platform. I will be very happy if u will work on this especially, in my weak zone. Now, I will be waiting for your positive response.
Yours faith
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
You have addressed all three bullet points of the prompt: describing your feelings about the performance, detailing your musical background, and requesting a collaboration. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a singer, although it leans slightly informal. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented. To reach a higher band, ensure that the development of your musical activities is more specific; for example, mentioning the genre of your band or your specific goals would add depth. Overall, the task is fulfilled effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific requirement of the prompt. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In the end' to guide the reader. However, the flow between some sentences is slightly mechanical, and there are instances where referencing is unclear, such as 'that’s u' and 'this play'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'collaborate', 'performance', and 'frequency'. However, there is a reliance on informal abbreviations like 'u' instead of 'you', which is inappropriate for a formal letter. Additionally, some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'peace level' or 'weak zone'. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding text-speak, which will help you achieve a more professional and sophisticated tone.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. For example, 'it’s looks like people was waiting' contains subject-verb agreement errors, and there are issues with article usage and capitalization. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.
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