Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Diljeet,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my feel which I recently felt when I reached at your live concert last week on Friday at Lural park.

Firstly, I would like to thank you for reaching our city Edmonton, I attend this concert with my best friend who is also local singer, and musician. I feel very energetic and motivate from your singing.

Secondly, I have also knowledge about music and I also participate in music For example band, classic music and hip-hop music.

At the end, I would like to say that I want join your music as I have knowledge about all kind of music and I have participated many music classes and shows which organized in my society as well as school.

Please let me know if you are interested to add in your music activities and please arrange a time for meeting to talk about music.

Thank you for your consideration and time.

Best regards,

Jaspreet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You expressed your feelings about the concert, described your musical background, and explained how you would like the singer to help you. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, when describing your musical activities, you list genres like 'classic music' and 'hip-hop' but do not elaborate on your specific skills or experience. Similarly, the request for help is quite vague. To improve, try to provide more specific details or examples to flesh out your points, which would make your letter more engaging and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your message. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'At the end' to signal the progression of your ideas. However, the transition between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, such as in the final paragraph where you ask to 'add in your music activities', which is grammatically awkward and makes the connection between your request and the singer's role slightly confusing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'concert', 'musician', and 'participated'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'express my feel' instead of 'express my feelings', and 'reaching our city' instead of 'coming to our city'. You also rely on simple, repetitive language. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise collocations and a wider range of vocabulary related to music and performance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include 'I attend this concert' (should be 'attended'), 'I feel very energetic and motivate' (should be 'motivated'), and 'which organized in my society' (should be 'which were organized'). There are also issues with prepositions and article usage, such as 'at Lural park' and 'in your music'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your intent, they are frequent enough to lower the score.

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