Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Arun Shah,

Today i am writing to this letter regrading your recent concert that held on North York stadium at 10 august. I also attended that concert i feel very happy.

In my life i have been attended sevral concert but your arrangements and your performance was one of the best one. I am very found off pop music and you did it very well. Moreover now i also tell my friends about you and your songs. When earlier person started a song that time everyone was doing something other activities however when you started a sing a song at that time it was over crowd just because you did it very well.

Furthermore, I also do musical activities like playing a drum. I also awarded by authorities for my high level of performance. Also i did participated many concert that i did play drum.

In your concert you sing a song good but your drum person did not do their job properly, So i want to help you regarding that job because i am master that activity. I do not charge you anything for next concert i just want to work with you.

I hope you got my point and i awaited your response,

Your Faithfully,

Ayush Prajapati

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly express your appreciation for the performance, describe your background as a drummer, and propose a collaboration. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the description of your musical activities is brief and lacks specific detail regarding the 'awards' mentioned. While the purpose of the letter is clear, the tone is occasionally inconsistent, and the explanation of how you could help the singer is quite direct. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are expanded with more descriptive language and that the tone remains consistently professional and polite throughout the correspondence.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your message. You use some basic cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'However' to link your ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as the transition into the second paragraph. Additionally, there are instances where the flow between sentences is disjointed, particularly in the third paragraph where the connection between your drumming experience and the concert participation is abrupt. Improving the variety of your linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would significantly enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'arrangements', 'performance', and 'authorities'. However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation that hinder the precision of your writing. For example, 'found off' should be 'fond of', and 'drum person' is not standard terminology; 'drummer' or 'percussionist' would be more appropriate. You also use 'over crowd' incorrectly to describe the audience's reaction. While your meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in word formation and collocation suggest a limited control over more sophisticated vocabulary. Focusing on learning common collocations will help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Your writing contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Common issues include incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'concert that held' instead of 'concert that was held'), subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'you sing a song good'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage and capitalization. While you attempt to use complex sentences, they often contain errors that affect clarity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically verb tense consistency and the correct use of articles, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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