Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
dear sir.
recently i joined a concert which in you performed.i am really big fan of you.i am listing your's song whenever i driven the car for long drive or when i have a free time in my home.
you sung a song.i listened your voice is very beautiful.i felt good and your's songs were made me very emotionally.
however i like music some time i listen emotional songs and some of time i listen energetic song.i'm also trying singing but not good like you.
i would like to ask you that how can you help me for my best performance when i sing a song.
i have many musical instruments but not a best teacher.i want to improve my performance and voice.would you like to tell me some tips about musical concert?if you help me about that i will really thankful to you and always my best wishes with you.i am waiting your's answer.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: expressing feelings about the performance, describing musical activities, and asking for help. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. The explanation of musical activities is vague, and the request for help is somewhat repetitive and lacks specific context. While the tone is appropriate for a letter to a singer, the ideas are not fully extended, which keeps the response at a lower band level. To improve, you should provide more specific details about your musical background and explain exactly what kind of guidance you are seeking, rather than just asking for general tips.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is organized into a single block of text, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of paragraphing to separate the different points required by the prompt. While there is a basic attempt at logical progression, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often inaccurate (e.g., 'however i like music some time'). The lack of clear transitions between ideas makes the flow feel disjointed. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks for each bullet point and incorporate a wider range of linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to connect your thoughts more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying on simple words like 'good', 'nice', and 'help'. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'listing your's song' instead of 'listening to your songs' and 'driven the car' instead of 'driving'. These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly unclear. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to music and performance, such as 'vocal range', 'technique', 'inspiring', or 'repertoire', and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical form.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with verb tenses ('you sung a song', 'i am listing'), subject-verb agreement, and the misuse of possessives ('your's'). Punctuation is also problematic, with many sentences lacking proper capitalization and spacing after periods. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that can impede the reader's understanding. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb-object order, and pay closer attention to verb tense consistency and standard punctuation rules.
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