Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Arjit Singh,

I hope this letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am writing this letter to inform you that I attend your concert and I really liked it. It was amazing performance. I loved that you have same energy as before you done well yesterday in a ground.

Moreover, I am a big fan of yours. I am interested in music from childhood so I started taking class of music in school. Firstly, I love to sing and love to play violin at a same time. Thereafter, I also know some beats offset song of yours I tried to play in my class and it was mind-blowing.

However, I know the basic things but I need your guidance in small task such as when I am playing a song I become little bit nervous and have no confidence to face a huge crowd. Secondly, when I am trying to make a rhythm in song and violin but cannot able to coordinate in a good form. So, it is really helpful if you teach me how to improve this problem.

Yours Lovingly

Ami

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You expressed your feelings about the concert, described your musical background, and clearly explained how you would like the singer to assist you. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a performer, although it leans slightly informal. The ideas are relevant and well-developed, providing enough detail to satisfy the requirements of the task. To reach a higher band, ensure that the connection between your musical activities and the specific help requested is even more explicit, as the transition between these sections is currently a bit abrupt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into three distinct paragraphs, each corresponding to a bullet point. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Firstly', 'Thereafter', and 'However' to guide the reader. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced, such as 'Thereafter' used to introduce a new point about your musical skills. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'beats offset song of yours', which makes the sentence difficult to follow. Improving the flow between sentences within paragraphs would help achieve a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'radiant', 'mind-blowing', and 'coordinate'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'attend your concert' (should be 'attended'), 'same energy as before you done well' (grammatically awkward), and 'beats offset song'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word choices are natural in the context of a formal or semi-formal letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies ('I attend' instead of 'I attended'), missing articles ('in a ground'), and issues with verb forms ('cannot able to coordinate'). While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of modal verbs, such as 'cannot' versus 'am not able to'.

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