Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Gurnam Bhullar,

I am writing to inform you that your live concert which was hold on MBD mall in Surrey. I attend it as you are my favorite singer therefore, I never miss chance to attend your every concert. I feel glad to attend your live programme because your all songs are related to family and easily we listen song to sit together in family. In concert, your performance was outstanding, me and my friend did lot of enjoy by listening your songs. I have also keen interest to sing song. Although, I know that I am not good singer yet, always try to learn it by attending classes and practice on daily basis. I always follow you as role model in singing industry as I want to get name and fame as like you. I hear form social media that you also give classes to tach singing So, I want to take classes from you. I hope that you will give me singing classes.

See you soon.

Your sincerely

Gurpreet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You expressed your feelings about the concert, described your musical activities, and explained your request for help. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention your interest in singing, the description of your 'musical activities' is quite brief and could be expanded with more specific details about your practice routine or the types of songs you enjoy. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a singer, though it leans slightly informal. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully developed with more descriptive language.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the concert experience to your personal interests and finally to your request. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'I am writing to,' 'In concert,' and 'I hope that' are used, but there is a lack of varied linking words to connect ideas more fluidly within paragraphs. Additionally, the paragraphing is non-existent; the entire letter is written as one block of text. Using clear paragraph breaks for each of the three bullet points would significantly improve the structure and readability of your response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'live concert,' 'role model,' and 'singing industry.' However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'did lot of enjoy' instead of 'enjoyed myself' and 'get name and fame' which is a non-standard idiom. There are also minor spelling and word-form errors, such as 'tach' instead of 'teach.' To improve, focus on learning natural collocations and refining your use of verbs to express feelings and actions more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('which was hold' instead of 'which was held'), missing articles ('attend it as you are my favorite singer'), and subject-verb agreement errors ('your all songs are'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and sentence boundaries. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common tense errors will help improve your accuracy.

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