Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or/ Madam,

I am writing this letter to let you know how happy I am to attend your performance at concert last night

It was my pleasure to saw your live show, your vocal range, stage presence and your dance were absolutely make my whole night special. I, Amandeep, a local singer, currently follow you and improving day by day while performing at small open mice nights and cafe around my town, I have recorded a small demo that I produced at my own small studio.

Since you are my major inspiration, I hope you might be willing to listen my demo tracks and offer some professional feedback on my vocal technique and song writing structure.

Furthermore, If you have any advice on how an individual artist can break into the industry or collaborate with local producers, i would be appreciated your insights.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Best regards,

Amandeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly express your appreciation for the performance, provide relevant details about your own musical background (singing and recording demos), and make a specific request for feedback and industry advice. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a performer, and the purpose is clear throughout. To reach a higher band, you could expand slightly on the 'musical activities' to make the letter feel more personal and detailed, but you have fully satisfied the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Since,' 'Furthermore,' and 'I look forward to,' which help the flow of ideas. However, the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother, and some sentences are slightly disjointed. Improving the use of linking words to connect your personal experience to your request for help would enhance the overall cohesion of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'vocal range,' 'stage presence,' and 'industry.' There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'open mice nights' (should be 'open mic nights') and 'i would be appreciated your insights' (should be 'I would appreciate your insights'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precision. Expanding your vocabulary to include more sophisticated collocations related to music and professional requests would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For example, 'It was my pleasure to saw' should be 'to see,' and 'your dance were absolutely make' contains errors in subject-verb agreement and tense. Additionally, there are punctuation issues, such as the incorrect use of the slash in 'Sir or/ Madam.' While the meaning remains clear, the frequency of these minor errors prevents a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic verb forms and subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your accuracy.

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