Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Karan,
I hope this message finds you well. I am writing to express the pleasure i had to witness you perfomance at the Summer tour in Halifax.
I attended your concert along with my wife as she is also one of the biggest fan of your music. It was an unbelievable experience to watch you performing live in The Scoiabank Centre in front of thousand of other followers. I was literally dancing along with my wife when you were siinging one of my favourite song.Overall, It was worth every penny to experience the rise of Punjabi music during your international tour.
I am excited to mention that I have a band and we usually organise our performance in birthday parties and college events.I would really appreciate if you could share some tips regarding creating our own music because I really admire how you write your own songs .
Looking forward to hearing back from you
Your's truely
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly express your appreciation for the performance, provide relevant details about your own band's activities, and make a specific request for advice on songwriting. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a performer, maintaining a respectful and enthusiastic register throughout. The ideas are well-developed and relevant to the task requirements, ensuring the reader understands the purpose of your communication immediately. To reach a higher band, ensure that the request for help is slightly more detailed, perhaps by explaining why his specific songwriting style is particularly influential to your band's creative process.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task, which helps the reader follow your narrative easily. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'I am writing to', 'I attended', and 'I am excited to mention' to link your thoughts. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and could be more varied to improve the flow between sentences. For instance, using more sophisticated transition words or phrases would enhance the overall structure. Paragraphing is used correctly, and the letter follows a standard, coherent structure suitable for a formal request.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'unbelievable experience', 'international tour', and 'appreciate'. There are some minor errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'perfomance' (performance), 'siinging' (singing), and 'Your's truely' (Yours truly). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations or less common vocabulary related to music and performance. For example, instead of 'one of the biggest fan', use 'one of your biggest fans'. Expanding your range to include more nuanced descriptive language would help elevate your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'the pleasure i had to witness you perfomance' (the pleasure I had witnessing your performance) and 'we usually organise our performance in birthday parties' (at birthday parties). Punctuation is generally functional, though there are some issues with capitalization and spacing after commas. Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear throughout the letter. To achieve a higher band, focus on improving your control over verb forms and prepositions, and ensure that your complex sentences are constructed with greater accuracy.
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