Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Arjit shingh,

I hope you are doing well, I have attend your recent concert, I am writing you this letter to you tell you that how much I liked you concert. I enjoyed a lot in you concert and all of the songs which was you sing are my favourite songs. I was very happy and one of my friend was not able to attend your concert so, he was so upset when I told him about concert.

I am also practicing with guitar and I have learnt since I was around ten. I want your help for guidance to do better on it. I saw that you are very good in playing guitar can you give me some tips and guidance, I am practicing everyday but I can't able to played good well. Please give me some ideas that can make me perfect.

I will waiting your reply and I am very happy if you give me advice and tips about activities that help me to do better, I know i cannot played like you but you, help can motivate me and I will not disappoint you. Thank you so much to give me your valuable time.

Best regards,

Alfina

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: expressing feelings about the performance, describing musical activities, and requesting specific guidance. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a performer. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, while you mention practicing the guitar, the request for help is a bit repetitive and lacks specific detail about what kind of musical style or technique you are struggling with. To improve, try to elaborate more on your personal musical journey or the specific impact the concert had on your motivation to reach a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. You use basic cohesive devices like 'I am also' and 'I will be waiting', which provide a logical flow. However, the transitions between sentences are sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'I know i cannot played like you but you, help can motivate me'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer to their antecedents would help move this into a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, such as 'valuable time', 'motivate', and 'performance'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'I have attend' instead of 'I attended' and 'played good well' instead of 'play well'. The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that verbs are used in the correct form to match the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Examples include 'all of the songs which was you sing' (subject-verb agreement and tense issues) and 'I can't able to played' (incorrect modal usage and verb form). While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and tense consistency prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of modal verbs will significantly improve your accuracy.

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