Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my contentment about your music concert at Mumbai city yesterday.

To commence with, I was on cloud nine, when i attended your concert. It was fantastic performance by your. I became your fan after attending this program. The songs were nostalgic and music was unbeatable. The way you play with guitar was also great.

I am music enthusiast. I love to play music and compose song. Everyday I wake up early and attend my music classes. I have learnt several music instruments. Music is my go to activity now. I am very dedicated to my hobby and have a disciplined personality.

Furthermore, I want to ask for some help of yours to improve my skills in music. It is quite challenging for me to handle instruments. So, I would like you to teach me some lessens on it. Moreover, you can provide some tips and tricks.

I hope you consider my request and send me some reply.

Yours faithfully,

RHP

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You expressed your feelings about the concert, described your musical activities, and made a request for help. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a singer, although the opening 'Dear Sir' is a bit formal given the context of being a fan. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, though the request for the singer to personally teach you lessons is slightly unrealistic, which affects the naturalness of the task response. Overall, the letter is well-structured and fulfills the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', and 'Moreover' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly misused in context. The progression of ideas is clear, and the paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the flow between sentences feels more natural rather than relying on standard list-like connectors.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including some idiomatic expressions like 'on cloud nine' and 'go to activity'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'contentment about your music concert' (should be 'enjoyment of') and 'lessens' (should be 'lessons'). While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, some phrasing is slightly unnatural. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but increasing your precision and refining your collocations would help you reach a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'fantastic performance by your' (should be 'yours'), 'I am music enthusiast' (missing article 'a'), and 'The way you play with guitar' (should be 'play the guitar'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. You have a reasonable grasp of basic grammar, but you need to pay closer attention to articles, possessive pronouns, and preposition usage to improve your accuracy and achieve a higher score.

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