Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.5)

Dear Mr. Parker,

I hope this message finds you in great spirits. I am writing this letter to formally express my gratitude after attending your concert at the Church Hill Hall last weekend.

Although I already had huge expectations from this event, I was completely mesmerized with the overall energy. Since childhood I have been looking up to you, especially your guitar playing techniques. Nevertheless, throughout the years I have just adored the way you perform and the powerful impact you leave on the audience.

Moreover, after getting inspiration from your musical lectures, I also got myself enrolled in music classes predominantly teaching classical music. I have already completed my beginner level course, and looking forward to get admission in intermediate level.

I would really appreciate it if you could assist me in selecting a suitable instrument, which is economical feasible and reliable. I really want to choose this as my career; therefore, I wanted to invest in such a professional instrument.

I look forward to getting your recommendations.

Best regards,

Tim Cook

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 8.0

The response successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly express your admiration for the performance, describe your musical background (enrolling in classical music classes), and provide a specific request for advice regarding instrument selection. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a performer. The ideas are well-developed and relevant, showing a clear purpose throughout the letter. The response is fully focused on the task requirements, and the structure is logical, making it easy for the reader to follow your intentions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 8.0

The letter is well-organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use cohesive devices such as 'Although', 'Nevertheless', 'Moreover', and 'therefore' to link your ideas effectively. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different aspects of the task. The progression of ideas is logical, moving smoothly from your experience at the concert to your personal musical journey and finally to your specific request for help. The flow is natural and the overall structure is coherent.

Lexical Resource — Band 7.0

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, using terms like 'mesmerized', 'predominantly', and 'economical feasible'. While the vocabulary is generally accurate and fits the context well, there are minor issues with collocation, such as 'economical feasible' (should be 'economically feasible') and 'looking forward to get admission' (should be 'looking forward to getting admission'). Despite these minor slips, the range is sufficient to convey your meaning precisely and naturally. The tone is consistently professional and appropriate for the intended recipient.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. Most of your sentences are error-free, and the grammar is generally strong. However, there are a few minor errors, such as 'I already had huge expectations from this event' (should be 'for this event') and 'looking forward to get admission' (should be 'getting'). These errors are non-systematic and do not impede communication. The control over punctuation and sentence structure is good, and the overall grammatical accuracy is high enough to support clear expression.

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