Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir

I am writing this letter to express my feelings for one of your concert which was held on 22nd June near Holland park. Firstly, I am biggest fan of your voice as well as singing abilities. The most precious thing which allured me at that concert was your confidence at live music performance along with dance. Honestly, I really felt that all your songs were related to the current reality.

Moreover, I had a dream since childhood to become a good singer. In order to complete my dream, I attended various small functions as a volunteer work.Also, I started to take music classes when I was in my sixth class. So, I can say that I have a little bit skills related to singing.

It would be helpful if you can invite me to join your band or background singer, as I want to learn more from you. You can contact me on my mail id or on my mobile number.

Thank you for your time and patience to give importance for my letter.

Yours faithfully

Jyoti Sharma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You expressed your feelings about the performance, described your musical background, and explained your request for mentorship. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a singer. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, when describing your musical activities, you mention 'small functions' and 'music classes' but could have provided more specific details to make your request more persuasive. The letter is clear and fulfills the requirements of the task, though it lacks the depth of development required for a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'Also' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical. For instance, the transition between your musical background and the request for help could be smoother. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, such as 'all your songs were related to the current reality', which is a bit vague. Overall, the structure is coherent, but the use of cohesive devices could be more varied and sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. You use some effective words like 'allured', 'precious', and 'volunteer'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'I am biggest fan' (missing article), 'give importance for my letter' (unnatural phrasing), and 'mail id' (informal). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over vocabulary. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more natural collocations and avoiding repetitive or slightly awkward phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'one of your concert' (should be plural 'concerts'), 'in my sixth class' (unnatural), and 'join your band or background singer' (parallelism error). Additionally, there are minor issues with articles and prepositions. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, you should focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately.

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