Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Diljit Dosanjh

I hope this email finds you well

I am writing this email to express my views from your concert happened last week at Bc stadium , Vancouver .

First of all , Thank you for performing at the stage after so many years . I have waited for this concert for more than a 5 years . The performance was on another level on that day especially your mesmerizing voice , you have a voice of an angel . You sing with so many emotions that everyone felt blessed during your last song performance.

Apart from this , I am your biggest fan , I am following you since 15 years as well as you inspired me to learn and feel the depth of music. However, I am pursuing masters in music from same university where you have studied .

On another hand , I need your love and support to polish my skills . I would like to join your music club so that I can also be a good singer like you . Looking forward to hear from you about the available opportunity.

Thank you

Ritika

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly express your admiration for the performance, provide relevant details about your musical background, and explain your desire for mentorship. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a performer. To reach a higher band, ensure that the details regarding your musical activities are more specific; for instance, mentioning what instrument you play or what specific genre you focus on would add depth to your ideas and make the letter more engaging.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Apart from this' and 'On another hand', to transition between ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or unnatural. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the flow between sentences is smoother. The use of paragraphing is appropriate, which helps the reader follow your narrative easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, using descriptive terms like 'mesmerizing' and 'depth of music'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'concert happened last week' (should be 'concert that took place') and 'from same university' (missing an article). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your message clearly, incorporating more precise collocations would elevate the quality of your writing and demonstrate a more sophisticated command of the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors, including missing articles ('at the stage' should be 'on stage'), incorrect preposition usage ('following you since 15 years' should be 'have been following you for 15 years'), and punctuation issues (extra spaces before commas). These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage will help improve your accuracy.

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