Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Aditya,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to express my feelings for you. I attended your concert last month in Mumbai for a very first time, it was amazing and memorable moments for me.

Actually, your melodious voice caught the attention of audiences and keep us connected with you. Moreover, when you started singing a gujarati songs, it was such a goose-bump moment for me, because, I was feeling thrill and energetic while I was listening your songs. Also, the venue was overcrowded with a lot of people and they were singing with you.

I am good drummer and I can play violin. Also, I won a plenty of local musical competitions in my town. Also, I have a desire to join your music school in order to inculcate strong musical skills and gain knowledge regarding various methods of singing.

As per my musical capabilities, I will play drum or violin in order to make your concert more effective and enjoyable for the local community.

I hope you consider my request and allows me to join your team soon. I look forward to your positive response in this matter.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Best regards,

Twinkle

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt effectively. You clearly express your admiration for the performance, describe your musical background (drummer and violinist), and explain your desire to join the singer's team. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a performer, maintaining a respectful and enthusiastic register throughout. The ideas are relevant and well-developed, providing enough detail to satisfy the requirements of the task. To reach a higher band, ensure that the connection between your musical skills and the specific help you can offer is more clearly articulated, as the current explanation is slightly vague.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Also', and 'In order to', which help the flow of ideas. However, the use of 'Also' is repetitive at the start of several sentences, which makes the cohesion feel slightly mechanical. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall flow. Paragraphing is used correctly to separate the different topics requested in the prompt, which aids readability.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'melodious', 'inculcate', and 'capabilities'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'for a very first time' (should be 'for the first time') and 'I was feeling thrill' (should be 'I felt thrilled'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and collocations. Expanding your vocabulary to include more idiomatic expressions or precise musical terminology would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'a gujarati songs' (article/plurality error), 'listening your songs' (missing preposition 'to'), and 'allows me' (subject-verb agreement error). While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that verbs are followed by the appropriate prepositions. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help you move into the higher band range.

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