Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Diljit Dosanjh,

I am writing to let you know that I am a big fan of you. Last week, I have attended your concert with my friends. As it was first sold out BC place stadium in the Canada by an punjabi artist so, it was such a proud moment for all us living here. The vibe and concept of the concert was tremendously impressive. We all did not sat even for a second.

There was one performance that was combination of your old music and new generation guitar tunes, which was perfectly played by Jason. He is one of the famous guitarist in the Vancouver. I personally love to plays guitar. But, I do not have much experience in this. As, I came in Canada as a student 5 years ago. In the starting, due to my studies and PR process. I did not gave much time to my passion.

I would like to become part of your band. It will help me learn more from the experienced people in your band.

Thank you for your consideration.

Yours faithfully

Parminder

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You expressed your feelings about the concert, described your musical interest in guitar, and explained your desire to join the band. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a performer. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how you would like him to help you is quite brief and lacks detail. To improve, try to elaborate more on your specific musical goals or how exactly you envision his mentorship or involvement helping your progress, rather than just stating you want to join the band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'As' and 'But' to connect ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the progression of ideas feels a bit disjointed, such as the transition between your musical background and your request to join the band. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to create smoother transitions between your sentences and paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'sold out', 'vibe', and 'performance'. However, there are some word choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'I am a big fan of you' (should be 'a big fan of yours') and 'one of the famous guitarist' (should be 'one of the famous guitarists'). To improve, focus on learning common collocations and paying closer attention to pluralization and preposition usage. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise descriptive adjectives would also enhance your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'I have attended' (should be 'I attended'), 'did not sat' (should be 'did not sit'), and 'I did not gave' (should be 'I did not give'). These errors in verb tense and form are noticeable. While your meaning is generally clear, you need to work on consistent verb tense usage and subject-verb agreement. Focusing on proofreading your work for these common errors will help improve your accuracy significantly.

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