Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Arijit,

I hope this letter finds you well. My name is Sam Mistry, and I am writing this to express my appreciation for your latest concert which was held last week.

Last week, I attended your concert Tour of Canada at Toronto and, I was in awe by watching your performance. Your voice was not only amazing but also peaceful. Everybody was talking about you.

I work at community center and I have been working on a few musical activities. Most of these activities are for old aged people to keep them in a good shape.

As you are expert in this field, I here by request you to help me with musical activities. You can help me to build rhythm note for a certain exercise so that elder do not have problem while exercising.

You can contact me at [redacted phone]. Waiting for you reply.

Yours faithfully,

Sam Mistry

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You expressed your feelings about the concert, described your musical activities at a community center, and made a specific request for help. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a singer. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how you want him to help you is quite brief and could be expanded to show a clearer connection between his expertise and your specific needs. Overall, the response is relevant and covers the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your ideas. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Last week' and 'As you are expert'. However, the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases. Some transitions feel a bit mechanical. Paragraphing is used correctly, and the letter follows a standard formal structure, which contributes to the overall coherence of the piece.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. You use words like 'appreciation', 'performance', and 'expert' correctly. However, there are some instances of slightly unnatural phrasing, such as 'old aged people' (better: 'the elderly' or 'senior citizens') and 'build rhythm note' (which is unclear). You also have a minor error in 'Waiting for you reply' (should be 'your'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise collocations and avoid repetitive sentence structures. The vocabulary used is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly despite these minor inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors. For example, 'I was in awe by watching' should be 'I was in awe watching' or 'I was awestruck by'. You also have missing articles, such as 'I work at community center' (should be 'a community center') and 'elder do not have problem' (should be 'the elderly do not have problems'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but ensure you check for small errors like the missing 'r' in 'your'. These errors do not impede communication but occur frequently enough to limit the score.

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