Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Arijit,

I hope you doing well. Myself Love Hans .I'm your one of loyal fan. the purpose to write this letter is just wanna tell you about the last concert of yours i attended which was incredible. Obviously there was huge rush of people and amazing environment.

However, the main purposes of this mail are as follows:

> Firstly, when i enter your concert i feel like i was on seventh heaven as because of your pleasant voice

> Moreover, as i also wanna be a great musician like you i also know to play some instruments like, guitar, drum, piano and so on. My style is more soft and slow rhythm with deep meaningful words.

> You are my inspiration specially your that some "Tum Hi Ho" is my favorite. Not even that song but also i like your all songs and i would love if you assist me to enhance my speed and vocabulary which leads to make more tunes and can match with my instrumental sound.

I'm very eager to be your student. Thank you for your precious time

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: expressing feelings about the performance, detailing musical activities, and requesting assistance. However, the development of these points is somewhat superficial. For instance, the request for help is vague, asking for assistance with 'speed and vocabulary' in a musical context, which is slightly unclear. While the tone is appropriate for a letter to a singer, the overall development lacks the depth required for a higher band score. The ideas are relevant, but the explanation of how the singer could specifically help is not fully explored.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as the bulleted list format which is not standard for a formal or semi-formal letter. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. While there is a logical progression of ideas, the referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall flow is hindered by the repetitive use of 'I' and the somewhat disjointed sentence structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks sophistication. There are several instances of informal or non-standard phrasing, such as 'wanna' instead of 'want to' and 'huge rush of people' which is slightly unnatural in this context. The phrase 'seventh heaven' is a good attempt at an idiom, but it is used somewhat awkwardly. The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is a reliance on basic descriptors. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding informal contractions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('I hope you doing well', 'I also know to play') and article misuse ('the purpose to write', 'when i enter your concert'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'as because of your pleasant voice'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and the bulleted list. These errors are noticeable and occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader, though the message remains generally understandable.

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