Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Shail,
I hope are doing well! I want to let you know my feel related to your singing in the recent concert.
I attend live concert in Toronto on 19 August 2026. There are number of singers come there. All singers perform very well but I like you're singing very good as it looks like you are singing from heart. I feel clam when you are singing my favorite song.
In this concert, there are musical activities happen like interactive with audience, compare recorded and performance and so on. I personally want you to become my musical teacher to help me learn the musical activities.
please let know if you are willing to become teacher and I really appreciate to you.
your faithfully
Navneet Cheema
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the development of ideas is insufficient. The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum, which limits the depth of the content. For instance, the description of your musical activities is vague, and the request for help lacks detail. To improve, you should expand on your personal musical background—such as what instruments you play or your goals—and provide more specific reasons why you want this particular singer to mentor you. Because the response is under-length, it fails to fully develop the required points, resulting in a lower score for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organized into short paragraphs, which is appropriate for the task. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences smoothly; for example, the transition between describing the concert and asking for lessons is abrupt. While the purpose of the letter is clear, the overall flow is hindered by the brevity of the sentences and the lack of logical connectors. Using more linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' would help improve the logical flow between your thoughts.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'perform very well' and 'singing very good' are simplistic and lack the precision expected at higher bands. There are also some errors in word choice, such as 'my feel' instead of 'my feelings' and 'clam' instead of 'calm'. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use a wider range of descriptive language related to music and performance, such as 'captivating', 'vocal range', or 'artistic expression'. The current range is just adequate to convey the basic message but lacks the flexibility needed for a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'I hope are doing well' (missing subject), 'I attend live concert' (tense error, should be past tense), and 'There are number of singers come there'. Additionally, there are punctuation and capitalization issues, such as 'your faithfully' instead of 'Yours faithfully'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, consistent verb tenses, and correct sentence construction. Increasing the variety of sentence structures will also help demonstrate better grammatical control.
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