Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Mr. Blaze,

I am writing with respect to your performance at the All Night Concert held at the Montana Hotel last week Friday. It was a very memorable and lively night due to singers like you who acted professionally.

Firstly, when you started singing, I was taken afloat because your song was powerful and impactful. Not only that, your voice was also melodious. I felt the weight of your performance, and scored you highest among other singers that graced the stage.

Meanwhile, it will be noteworthy that I let you know that I play flute, and I started performing at a very young age. Recently, I joined a street band that I have been following to go and perform.

Moreover, I would like you to help and groom me to become a better artist like you. It is in my best interest to be mentored by you, and learn how to play flute to fit your kind of music. I am ever ready to receive training from you to help align with your nature of music, and begin my journey of spreading strong message through my music.

In conclusion, you have left a great impact in me through your music, and I would like to do same in other people’s lives. I look forward to hearing from you as regards my interest.

Yours Sincerely,

Cherechi Ekeh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly express your admiration for the performance, provide relevant details about your musical background with the flute, and make a specific request for mentorship. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a performer. The ideas are well-developed and the purpose of the letter is clear from the outset. To reach a higher band, ensure that the connection between your musical activities and the request for help is slightly more nuanced, as the transition between your current band experience and the request for mentorship could be more fluid.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task. You use cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Meanwhile', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced. For instance, 'Meanwhile' is not the most natural choice to introduce your musical background. Improving the variety and subtlety of your linking words would enhance the flow of the text and make the progression of ideas feel more natural and less like a list of requirements.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, using terms like 'memorable', 'impactful', 'melodious', and 'mentored'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'taken afloat' (likely meant 'taken aback' or 'blown away') and 'scored you highest' (which sounds a bit like a competition judge rather than an audience member). Despite these minor inaccuracies, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly and effectively. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and idiomatic expressions that fit the context of music and professional admiration.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, and the majority of your sentences are clear and error-free. There are some minor grammatical slips, such as 'I have been following to go and perform' (which is slightly awkward) and 'left a great impact in me' (should be 'on me'). Punctuation is generally accurate, and the letter follows the standard formal structure. The control of grammar is good, and the errors present do not impede communication. To aim for a higher band, try to incorporate a wider variety of complex grammatical structures with greater precision.

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