Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Navin,

I am writing this letter to inform you about your last week concert experience which I attended. Your performance this time was good as always ,but the thing that fascinate me was your moon walk. For some movement I witness the soul of Michel Jackson on that stage.

I had listen all your music album since 2017, but after you release Vale Vale song on YouTube music then I tried to duplicate that song. I also modify song with one of your music photograph and I also posted on YouTube and got a lot of attention by your fans. Whenever you are free just listen and provide me your feedback.

If you like my remix, then is there any chance where I can join your team. My contribution does not make that much difference as compared to your team members but just want to make slight difference.

Thank your for your time, looking forward to your response.

Dirgh Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all three bullet points of the task. You clearly express your feelings about the performance, describe your musical activities (listening to albums and creating remixes), and explain how you would like the singer to help you. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how you would like him to help you is a bit vague, focusing more on a request for feedback rather than a specific collaboration. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are more fully extended and that the tone remains consistently appropriate for a letter to a professional.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each addressing a specific part of the prompt. There is a clear progression of ideas from the concert experience to your personal musical activities and finally the request. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. For example, the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, such as 'modify song with one of your music photograph,' which makes the connection between your activities and the singer's work a bit difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'duplicate,' 'remix,' and 'contribution.' However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'last week concert experience' (should be 'last week's concert'), 'music photograph' (likely meaning 'music video' or 'image'), and 'make slight difference' (should be 'make a slight difference'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. Expanding your vocabulary to include more natural collocations would improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and articles. For example, 'I had listen all your music album' should be 'I have listened to all your music albums,' and 'the thing that fascinate me' should be 'the thing that fascinated me.' There are also missing articles throughout the text. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will be beneficial.

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