Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope this letter finds you in good health. Well, I am writing this letter to share joy I had at your recent singing concert.

To begin with, I am your huge fan and I used to here your all songs since my childhood. I went to your Mumbai concert last Saturday. I went there with my friends. It was the first time that I had attend your live concert. Your performance was full of energy and emotions that it had become my life time memorable experience.

Moreover, I am a well-trained musician. I am expert in playing piano and drum. I have completed a five years of music course from Ontario music school of Canada. I have certificate of music too.

Furthermore, I would love to take part in your orchestra band. As I have described I can play piano and drum. In addition I am also good in singing. I can help you if you are looking for an artist who can handle playback singing.

It would be pleasured to hearing from you.

Yours Faithfully,

Khushi Patel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly express your feelings about the concert, detail your musical background, and explain how you would like the singer to help you. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a performer. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, while you mention your musical training, providing more specific details about your style or experience would have strengthened the response. The letter is well-structured and addresses the requirements effectively, though it lacks the depth of vocabulary and nuance that would push it into the higher bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific part of the prompt. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore' to transition between ideas. While these are functional, they are somewhat mechanical and repetitive. The progression of ideas is clear, and the reader can easily follow your narrative from the concert experience to your musical background and finally to your request. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the flow between sentences feels more natural rather than relying on standard list-like transitions.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'memorable experience', 'well-trained musician', and 'playback singing'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'used to here your all songs' (should be 'hear all your songs') and 'It would be pleasured to hearing from you' (should be 'It would be a pleasure to hear from you'). These errors do not impede communication, but they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and common English collocations. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives would also enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you successfully convey your message, there are several grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I had attend' (should be 'I had attended'), 'I have completed a five years of music course' (should be 'a five-year music course'), and 'I am expert in playing' (should be 'I am an expert at playing'). These errors are frequent but do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning. To reach a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that verb tenses are used consistently throughout the letter.

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