Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Shaan,

I am wiring to express my satisfaction of a concert I recently attended at New Delhi on special occasion of new year.

I must say that your performance was very electrifying and I truly enjoyed your all songs, especially when you sang old Bollywood song. Moreover, your voice was very smooth and soothing to hear. My all friends and family members were appreciate your performance with dancing.

I am also learning music at Indian Music college and I am taking parts in small event for singing and dancing. Moreover, I am learning composing and lyrics writing for famous singers. I have recently launched The Royal Band for small concerts.

I would like to learn many thing from you such as singing with melody voice and confidence improvement among audiences. I would really appreciate if you could help me to improve my musical activities.

Thank you for your time and consideration, I look forward to your positive response.

Kind regards,

Raj

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly expressed your feelings about the concert, provided relevant details about your musical background, and explained how you would like the singer to assist you. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a performer, and the purpose of the communication is clear throughout. To improve, ensure that you expand slightly more on the 'how' regarding the singer's assistance, as the current request is a bit general. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'I am also' to transition between ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more refined to separate the musical activities from the request for help more distinctly. The progression of ideas is easy to follow, and the letter maintains a consistent focus from start to finish. Using a wider variety of linking words would help improve the flow between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'electrifying', 'soothing', and 'consideration'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'wiring' instead of 'writing', and 'my all friends' instead of 'all my friends'. Additionally, 'appreciate your performance with dancing' is slightly unnatural. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more attention to standard English collocations and proofreading for spelling slips. Expanding your repertoire of descriptive adjectives would further enhance your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'satisfaction of a concert' (should be 'satisfaction with'), 'your all songs' (should be 'all your songs'), and 'were appreciate' (should be 'appreciated'). These errors are frequent but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To reach a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures while maintaining accuracy will also be beneficial.

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