Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear karn Ajula,
I hope you are doing well, i am writing my experince about recently concert which was 15 aug in toronto at 10 pm. I love your music , since i was teenager i just lisent your songs on repeat. It was great chance through the concert wtaching you live.
I just wants to share my expreince which was unforgotten. I cannot expresss my feeling in words. Everything was perfect safe environmet speacial for girl's which was great. We were 5 friends who were attended the concert and we did 5 hours dance unstop.
I also have huge interest in music . I want to learn more about the music activities, like making lyrics beats so on.
Thank you so much for your time . I really want to meet you in perosn and talk about more you journey .Look forward for your response.
Kind Regards,
Gagandeep.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The letter covers all three bullet points: expressing feelings about the performance, describing musical activities, and requesting help. However, the development of these points is quite limited. The request for help is vague, as you do not specify how the singer could assist you beyond a general desire to talk about his journey. Furthermore, the response is slightly under the 150-word minimum, which negatively impacts the overall task completion. To improve, you should expand on your specific musical goals and provide a more concrete request for guidance to ensure the response is fully developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow between sentences is often disjointed due to a lack of cohesive devices. For example, the transition between the concert experience and your personal musical interests is abrupt. You rely on simple sentence structures, which makes the progression of ideas feel mechanical. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition to this') to connect your ideas more fluidly and improve the logical flow of the letter.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You use basic terms such as 'great chance' and 'huge interest', which are repetitive. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'experince', 'lisent', 'wtaching', 'environmet', and 'perosn', which occasionally distract the reader. To improve, you should focus on using more sophisticated collocations and ensuring accurate spelling. Using more descriptive adjectives and precise verbs would help convey your enthusiasm for the concert and your musical ambitions more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('I just wants'), incorrect verb tenses ('we did 5 hours dance unstop'), and missing articles or prepositions ('since i was teenager'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and apostrophes (e.g., 'girl's'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical slips will significantly improve your accuracy.
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