Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Hariharan,

I am writing this letter to express my gratitude after attended your concert in Toronto, happened last month.

Your performance were totally unbelievable, including classical and pop music. The devotional song, which you sung in the beginning, offered peaceful thoughts and relax my mind and whole body by removing all anxiety and tensions.

I also perform musical activities covered in various ways, including solo performance in singing, musical patterns on electronic pad and, drum. off beat cods from keyboard, and harmonizing with backup singer offer me huge variety of singing style. Not only that, I also owned one studio in the town of the Kitchener, named as a Jack studio and masters.

I will really appreciate, If you would give me a favour with guiding some vocal notes, that you played on that concert. Secondly, your way of playing piano is unmatched with anyone else, due to your presence of mind which helps you to create the outstanding vibes at live concert. I can even pay you a fees and if you have any other requirements. Donot hesitate and let me know directly.

I will wait for your further response.

Your faithfully.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly express your feelings about the concert, describe your musical background, and make a specific request for guidance. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a performer. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed or expressed with awkward phrasing, such as the description of your studio. To reach a higher band, ensure that your explanations are more concise and naturally phrased. Overall, the purpose of the letter is clear and the requirements of the task are fully met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Not only that' and 'Secondly', to link your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward sentence structures and punctuation errors, such as the fragmented list of musical activities. The transition between your musical background and the request for help could be smoother. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that sentences are not overly fragmented will help improve the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'devotional song', 'anxiety', and 'unmatched'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'give me a favour with guiding' instead of 'give me some guidance' and 'pay you a fees' instead of 'pay you a fee'. Some phrasing, like 'off beat cods', is unclear. While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your message, you need to focus on more accurate collocations and standard English expressions to move into the higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You make several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('Your performance were', 'which you sung') and tense usage ('after attended'). Punctuation is also problematic, particularly with the unnecessary commas in the list of musical activities. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to distract the reader. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms will significantly improve your grammatical accuracy.

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