Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Hi,

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my happiness which i feel during last concert of satinder sartaj which is held in scotia arena in Toronto on 26 july. i am very excited for your show because you are my favourite singer and it is my first concert which i attend live in Canada during my whole life. Not Only is but alos it is my childhood dream that i want to listen to live beacause your all songs are very nice and alo your musical activities which are very soft and quiet . which makes me peaceful. i just want to let you know that with soft and classical music, everyone feel energetic, active and comfortable which we can listen in a family . I want to give you one massage that you are very talented singer and different one from others. because no one sing like you in soft and suffi way.

Thankful

sukhpreet kaut

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task, though the development of the second and third points is quite limited. You mention your musical activities briefly by describing the singer's music as 'soft and quiet', but you do not clearly explain your own musical background or activities as requested. Furthermore, the final requirement—explaining how you would like him to help you—is entirely missing from your letter. To improve, ensure you dedicate a full sentence or two to each bullet point. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a singer, but the lack of specific details regarding your own musical involvement prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks a clear structure. You have used two different salutations ('Hi' and 'Dear Sir'), which is confusing. The paragraphing is non-existent, making the text appear as a single block of ideas. While there is a basic attempt to link ideas using words like 'because' and 'also', the flow is often interrupted by repetitive phrasing and awkward sentence construction. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks for each main point and ensure you use a consistent, formal opening and closing. The transition between your feelings about the concert and your musical activities is abrupt and lacks logical progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic adjectives like 'nice', 'good', and 'soft'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'alos' (also), 'beacause' (because), 'massage' (message), and 'suffi' (likely meaning Sufi). While your meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the frequent spelling mistakes hinder the overall quality of the writing. To achieve a higher band, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to music, such as 'melodic', 'composition', or 'vocal style', and pay closer attention to spelling accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede readability. You struggle with verb tenses, such as 'which i feel' (should be 'felt') and 'which is held' (should be 'was held'). There are also issues with sentence structure, such as 'Not Only is but alos it is my childhood dream', which is grammatically incorrect. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. You rely mostly on simple sentences; incorporating more complex structures with correct subordinating conjunctions would help demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.

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