Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 4.5)
I Really visited concert last week. That was very fabulous concert.Mostly,I dislike the concert or other gathering activities.However my friend forced for this. Owing to i went to the musical studio.
Many individuals contemplate, the concert promote the bold environment rather than the entertainment. Honestly, when I attend this concert, I felt very gorgeous. There were several celebaraties in which many were my favorite. The whole ground was full with boys or girls. That was my first experienced about concert. in the concert people were very excited and howling with the name of singer. The one individual throughs own shirt for the auto graph. All the moments of a concert were amazing for me.Now, I felt the scene of this adventure and felt pleasant.
The singer was very young and handsome. Firstly, his voice effected me more and then his hand shaking moments during his performance.With the passage of a week I cannot escape from my mind of this beautiful performance and view.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the core requirements of the prompt. While you mention your feelings about the performance, you completely omit the section regarding your own musical activities and how you would like the singer to help you. The task instructions specifically ask for these details, and their absence means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure you read the bullet points carefully and dedicate a paragraph to each one. Currently, the letter focuses almost exclusively on describing the concert atmosphere rather than engaging with the specific requests of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks a clear logical progression. Paragraphing is inconsistent, and the transition between ideas is often abrupt or confusing, such as the jump from discussing the concert to mentioning 'musical studio' without context. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, making the text feel like a collection of disjointed sentences rather than a cohesive letter. To improve, use linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to connect your ideas, and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that relates back to the prompt's requirements.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and often used incorrectly. For example, you use 'gorgeous' to describe your feelings, which is an inappropriate collocation for this context. Phrases like 'howling with the name' and 'throughs own shirt' are unnatural and impede the reader's understanding. There is also a reliance on basic, repetitive language. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations—words that naturally go together—and avoid translating directly from your native language, which often leads to awkward phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that often hinder communication. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('I Really visited'), subject-verb agreement ('concert promote'), and word order. Many sentences are simple, and attempts at more complex structures are often faulty, such as 'Owing to i went to the musical studio.' Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct verb forms, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect prepositions.
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